D#14 HW#6 Course companticies deadline reflections

Again, I didn't find everything but here is what I got:
I. Applying Knowledge of Rhetorical Contexts
A. Circumstance
I learned that it is important to narrow the research topic that I chose, to look for karios (by the way that was also a new word I learned), and to figure out the purpose and audience for my research papers

B. Purpose
I think the reading helped me the most with creating my conclusion paragraph of my essay.
C. Topic
D. Audience
These things are important so as to not bore the reader and to make my paper interesting enough that I will want to write it
E. Writer
Writing the essay was a course goal so i guess it helped with that aspect of it. It helped me better understand how to conclude a paper, which is part of the writing process.
II. Refining Effective Processes
A. Invention
B. Drafting
Well this week we had to write up a draft so we are most of the way toward that goal. I learn by doing so as i was writing the proposal i learned how to write one.
C. Feedback
learned how to peer edit, something I haven't really done much before. I also got peer edited which will help me make my paper better to :)
D. Revision
E. Presentation
this weeks work helped me achieve my goal of turning a good research proposal. Since I have never written one before it really helped me learn how to wright one.
III. Researching Critically
A. Primary and secondary sources
I also think the part about identifying the type of research to be done will help my papers in the future.

B. Note taking
This weeks topic, conducting research, has really helped prepare me for my paper
C. Summary and paraphrase
It helped me to assess weather my resources were credible or not. This information is always important to know when writing a paper. If your resource isn't credible then is your paper? I would think not. I will use this is future papers to make sure my resources are crediable so my paper is through and crediable.D. Documentation of sources
We had to do some research, site our sources, read about MLA (can I say boring? ;) ) a
E. Information literacy
IV. Writing Persuasively
A. Logical appeals
B. Ethical appeals
C. Emotional appeals
D. Authority
E. Evidence
V. Applying Conventions
A. Citation style
B. Format
In addition, the grammar assignment helped me to focus on the flow of my sentences so that my paper will be better in the end.
D. Structure
My course competency this week was to figure out the organization of my paper. The web we did really help organize my thoughts. The reading also helped as it showed me where I needed to do a little more research.
E. Mechanics

D#14 HW#5 writing project reflection course compenticies

I couldn't find all of the topics in my writing reflections but here is what i did find:
I. Applying Knowledge of Rhetorical Contexts
A. Circumstance
The first thing I did in completing this project was to brainstorm.
B. Purpose
C. Topic
The first step I did when completing this assignment was to think of a topic I wanted to know more about.
D. Audience
E. Writer
II. Refining Effective Processes
A. Invention
I then wrote what ever came to mind. I then went through and put alike paragraphs together and made sure the sentences when together.
B. Drafting
I then organized my research into a workable essay.
C. Feedback
I didn't revise my worked biased on turnitin.com because i only had a 1% match and that was a technical term so I felt I didn't need to revise because of that.
D. Revision
I then revised and edited it then turned it in.
E. Presentation
I then revised a third time and added a title
III. Researching Critically
A. Primary and secondary sources
Next, I researched the topic and wrote the review of research to make sure my resources were credible.
B. Note taking
C. Summary and paraphrase
Then I did a short annotation for each.
D. Documentation of sources
Then I reread through all my annotations and picked the sources that seamed most relevant. I then wrote longer annotations for each of the 8 sources I picked.
E. Information literacy
IV. Writing Persuasively
A. Logical appeals
B. Ethical appeals
C. Emotional appeals
D. Authority
E. Evidence
V. Applying Conventions
A. Citation style
The thing I focused in this paper was using sources in my writing. I usually just write what is on my mind so it was different haveing to use most information from sources.
B. Format
C. Structure
I then went through and put alike paragraphs together and made sure the sentences when together.
E. Mechanics
I think it helped me be more careful because when i revised, and even while writing i was specifically looking out for my spelling.

D#14HW#4 writing reflection

The first step I did when completing this assignment was to think of a topic I wanted to know more about. Next, I researched the topic and wrote the review of research to make sure my resources were credible. I then organized my research into a workable essay. I then revised and edited it then turned it in. These steps worked really well from me so I don't think I would change anything and I definitely would use the same strategy for the next paper.I am most proud that I finally finished this project because I was struggling with where to start. But I finally got it written so that is what I am most proud of. I didn't really have any concerns with this paper I am pretty confident in it. The only thing i might have needed to do was site my sources differently but next time I'll ask about it before I turn it in. Turnitin.com didn't give me any reports so i cant comment on that. The thing I focused in this paper was using sources in my writing. I usually just write what is on my mind so it was different haveing to use most information from sources. One of the course outcomes is to wright a research paper and I feel I achieved that fully.

D#14 HW#2 editing stratigies

This is one of the strategies I used from the owl at Purdue website: "Examine the overall construction of your paragraphs, looking specifically at length, supporting sentence(s), and topic sentence. Individual paragraphs that are significantly lacking length or sufficient supporting information as well as those missing a topic sentence may be a sign of a premature or under-developed thought."
This strategy worked pretty well for me. I looked at each paragraph individually and I was able to pick out what was important and what was not. Also i was able to add a bit to a few of the paragraphs. Peer editing was another strategy that I used because it worked well last time. Peer editors are able to find things you missed. The final strategy that I used was to read my paper out loud. It helps if you hear your writing because you can hear any mistakes you have made.

D#13 HW#5 grammer assignment #5

This week i chose to work on my people tense. I am known for useing alot of "you"s in my paper. I know that is not good writing that instead you are supposed to use "one" or people or something to that nature. I also chose my research paper because i want a good grade on it. I used the daily writing tips web site which said to put one inplace of you and to make sure its himself or herself that goes along with "one" and not "themselve."
Orig:Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect the people. For one, the US government has “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).
Revised:
Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect her. For one, the US government “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).

D#13 HW#4 peer review

http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw8-rough-draft.html
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw8-draft-of-wp3.html
I learned alot of information from my class mates blogs. I liked how Marissa used personal testimony and how she made her argument hard to argue with. I didn't get any reviews on my draft because there are only two other people keeping up with this class and they have already finished their work.Turnitin.com also had no comments for me. I will however go and revise my own draft as I need to add to it to make it longer and I need to make sure it flows well.

D#13 HW#2 paragraph analysis

What is the point of the paragraph?
1. to invite the reader in.
2. to give some background on the subject
3. to give the history on the subject
4. proof for my argument
5-6 proof against my argument containing counter arguments that support my argument
7. to restate why it how my topic relates to my audience and to answer the big question i have been building to
8. to restate my theses and call to action/conclude
How does the paragraph function in the argument?How does the paragraph function in the paper as a whole?
1. helps draw the reader in
2-3. introduces my argument and why it is important and how it relates to my audience.
4-6. the arguements for and against my topic, proof for my argument
7-8 to restate my argument and to get the readers to agree with me then finish with a call to action
How does the paragraph relate to the paragraph above? How does the paragraph relate to the paragraph below? How does the paragraph transition to the paragraph above? How does the paragraph transition to the paragraph below?
Paragraph 1 is the start of the whole paper so it introduces the whole paper as well as paragraph two which explains what paragraph 1 started talking about. Leads in to paragraph 3 which gives the background on the issue. Paragraph 2 transitions by taking the subject in the last sentence of paragraph 2 and inserting it into sentence one of paragraph 3. Paragraph four gets in to the arguements which is the main subject of the paper. It transitions with the word "because". Paragraphs 5 and 6 both give reasons against my arguements as well as my counter arguements to those objections. They use the transition words "even with" and "another." Paragraph 7 is transitioned into by a "however" and it gives the answer to the big question people are wondering. Finally paragraph 8 in transitioned with an "ultimately" and concludes the paper highlighting the main points as well as giving a call to action and finishing with a source quote.

D#12 HW#8 Rough Draft WP#3

Is It A Problem?
“All interest in disease and death is only another expression of interest in life.“
Thomas Mann
Today Americans face many worries, whether it is worrying about a lost job and a mortgage, to having too many bills. We don’t have the time to worry about what we are eating. That is why, for so many years, people have been getting sick form their food, the most common being food poisoning. But what if there was something in you food that there is no medication for, and that once symptoms start to show you are diagnosed dead. Well the bad news is that there is such a thing. It is called Bovine spongiform encephalopathy(BSE). Because this deadly disease dosnt have any cases reported in humans in America, many people would agree that the government is doing a good job of protecting its people. However, others believe there are still not enough laws in place because the possibility of getting BSE still exists. Neither can be proven write or wrong, but the evidence suggests that our government is doing a lot to protect us.
What exactly is Bovine spongiform encephalopathy? “Bovine spongiform encephalopathy (BSE) is a disease condition in cattle between two and eight years old and is always fatal.” Howitworks.com, a well known science website, describes why this disease is so fatal. “Once the infectious agent enters the brain, it can lie dormant for several years (even as long as 10 to 15 years). When activated, the agent kills brain cells, leaving large areas of spongy holes. Also, large clumps of abnormal prion proteins (plaques) are found in brain cells. Once the agent is activated, the disease runs its course in less than one year, and ultimately results in death.” (Freudenrich, Ph.D., Craig). The site also states that the cows become infected by contact with brain or other nervous-system tissue from an infected individual (mostly through ingestion, as seen in later paragraphs). The cause of BSE is unknown but what is known is that BSE is smaller than a virus, it can’t be killed by cooking freezing, or chemically and even disinfectants are powerless against this agent (Freudenrich, Ph.D., Craig. Howstuffworks.com). As can be seen, this agent, if ingested is fatal.
This agent, however, was not always a problem. In fact it is a newer disease. Maxime Schwartz, the author of "How The Cows Turned Mad,” did her research on the subject for the prestigious University of California. After her extensive research, (she even lists her creditable resources in the back of her book) she found that the origin of mad cow was in Europe in the 1730 and actually started with sheep and was call Distemper (p. 5). Reported cases of BSE in cows however, didn’t start until 1985, but weren’t diagnosed until two years later (p 142). First lesions were noticed all over the cows body, the cows lost nerve control and either death or slaughter occurred soon after (p. 143). These cases began popping up all over Europe. The possibility that BSE could spread to humans was considered soon after (p.153). Scientists found that it was possible thus the ban of using infectious organs such as brain, stomach, and nervous tissue since there was no way to identify animals incubating the disease (these animals showed no symptoms) from those that were healthy (p.154). Today, there are still inefficient tests that confirm the presence of BSE in healthy individuals and there have been over 185,000 confirmed cases since 1986, with less than 100 cases being reported per week (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.). Even though these numbers are down from what they used to be, there are still cases being reported.
Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect the people. For one, the US government has “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).
Even with all of these measures being put in place, many still believe it is not enough. One such person is editorialist Thomas Ropp. He believes that diet pills could contain mad cow. Even though the idea sounds farfetched, he could be on to something. “The FDA has determined that some dietary supplements contain bovine pituitary extract. Translation: freeze-dried cow brain. This could be trouble if the parts used for this ingredient were to come from cows infected with bovine spongiform encephalopathy, the proper name for mad cow disease” (HEALTH PILLS COULD CARRY 'MAD COW'). However, it is unlikely that this additive is in all diet pills, it is an additive that has to be labeled as cow brain or the like. The people that take these pills believe that “ingesting cow brain improves your wits” (Thomas Ropp).
Another big issue is that animal feed could be contaminated. To cut cost, some large companies feed meat to their cows and other food animals in order for them to grow more quickly. However, respectable farmers only feed their cows pre-mixed food (pellets made from organic material) from a feed lot (BSE Information). According to the FDA, it is illegal to feed ruminant animals meat or any other substance containing animal byproducts. To make sure this and other food laws are being followed, the FDA conducts ruminant feed inspections. “The FDA's December 1998 enforcement plan for the ruminant feed rule includes education as well as inspections. Firms that are found to be in violation of any of the provisions of the regulation are re-inspected to determine if they have corrected the violations. Many of the firms have committed to implementing the regulation, so there are higher levels of compliance at the time of the follow-up inspection.” (BSE Information). If the firm doesn’t straighten up by the second time they are completely shut down (BSE Information). Although some people have objections, the government is doing a good job in protect its people.
However, the question becomes: Is beef safe? According to the FDA, beef is completely safe because of all the laws and inspections they have put in place ( BSE Information). Let us take a look at the evidence, though:
1. There has only been one possible case of Mad Cow in humans in America. This person, however, used to live in the UK where 99% of the cases have occurred (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.).
2. There have only been a few cases of BSE in cows in the United States, thoses of which were reported and contained right away (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.).
3. The FDA has put in place many laws and inspections to make sure beef is safe (BSE Information) and is adding new ones everyday (Tom Lutey).
4. The US does not accept imported beef (BSE Information)
5. There could be cow brain parts in some diet pills, but the risk of contracting the disease from these is extremely low (Thomas Ropp).
6. Each year, the number of reported cases of BSE becomes less (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.).
It is only fair to let one make one’s own judgment at this point. It is my opinion that beef is safe for Americans to keep on eating.
Ultimately, It has been questioned whether our government is doing enough to protect the American public from the deadly beef disease. Since it is a newer disease, only Known since the early 1980’s, there isn’t a cure or a known cause yet. But because there haven’t been any confirmed cases of BSE in humans and very few in cattle, the government is doing its job quite well. There is a miniscule risk of catching BSE from eating beef and other animal byproducts, with the highest risk in ground meats like hamburger and sausage. If Americans want to lessen this risk, Americans can further reduce their risk of contracting the disease by choosing whole muscle cuts of beef like roasts and steak (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.). Americans can reduce the risk even still by avoiding beef and other meat byproducts all together. But as the writer, Kurt Vonnegut, Jr. puts it, ““Being American is to eat a lot of beef steak, and boy, we've got a lot more beef steak than any other country, and that's why you ought to be glad you're an American” (Thinkexist.com).

D#12 HW#10 reflection

I think the reading helped me the most with creating my conclusion paragraph of my essay. Writing the essay was a course goal so i guess it helped with that aspect of it. It helped me better understand how to conclude a paper, which is part of the writing process.
I commented on:
Corey D#12 HW#6 _ http://corey2458.blogspot.com/2009/11/deadline-12-homework-6.html
Summer D#12 HW#10- http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw10-reflect
HW#7 - http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw7-decide-which-presentation-mode.html
Marissa Rodas D#12 HW#5 - http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw5-develop-closure.html

D#12 HW#7 decide which presentation mode is appropriate

Purpose:
The requirements are posted on ENG102.com for all students to read. So see that for the fulfillment of the paper.
Audience:
The audience expects the paper to be interesting and effective. They will for sure have access to a computer. An essay is the chosen presentation form, so that is what they will respond to and that is where they will be looking for my argument. I don't think there is a specific time my audience would be interested in reading my paper. I think the other students and the teacher will be most interested in my research paper.
Topic:
An essay style presentation is the best for my topic and my argument. The ay mad cow works might be tough for my audience to picture without a diagram so i might put one in the paper.
Author:
I am most familiar with blog applications. That is where I will be posting my paper so that is all I need.

D#12 HW#6 identify possible frames

I tried doing what the book said but in the end, it made my paper seem sloppy and made it less effective. Since the introduction and conclusion are so different, which you will notice in my paper, this doesn't work for me.

D#12HW# develop closer

Well, obviously the issue of weather beef is safe needs to be repeated, as well as the issue of weather or not our government is protecting us. Maybe some support will be repeated but I'm not sure. The only thing that could happen if the issue continues is that more people will die. That could worry or frighten my audience. I would just emphasize these effects and try to put them in that situation. This issue is parallel to many other farm raised diseases, some of which have the same effects. I could add this but I do not think this will healp my cause much.

D#12 HW#4 draft an effective introduction

Mad cow could happen to anyone that eats beef.I'm sure my audience is neutral to the issue at this point because they haven't read my paper yet. However, after they have read it, they will stand with me. My authority to wright comes as a concerned citizen. Many other scientists have written books, blogs, articles, and the like about mad cow. Even reporters and government officials, pretty much every type of person has written something about mad cow. They have strengths as their creditability and I'm not sure this topic has weaknesses, except if the writer is not confident in their opinion, but I have not run across that. My audience probably doesn't know a lot about my topic, but they will learn a lot more after reading my paper.I am not sure how long my paper will be. I don't like having a set amount of pages I have to write. I like the freedom to write enough to get my point across, but not too much that I have to use "fillers" which make the paper uninteresting.

Mad cow could happen to anyone that eats beef. A person could get it from eating their afternoon lunch, or their perfectly prepared dinner. Mad cow in meat is invisible to the naked eye as well as the rest of the 5 senses. One could be eating and not even know it. How can we protect ourselves then? Well one answer is to stop eating meat all together. However, since most people would take the risk rather then give up their precious steak, there are several other options.

This paragraph is something I could use to develop my conclusion/call to action.

D#12 HW#3 create an outline

claim: The government is not doing enough to protect Americans from mad cow.
Section 1: background information.
Section 2: establish the nature of the situation.
Section 3: establish what caused mad cow to be spread.
Section 4: argument.
Section 5: call to action/conclusion

reflection D#11 HW#8

My course competency this week was to figure out the organization of my paper. The web we did really helped organize my thoughts. The reading also helped as it showed me where I needed to do a little more research. My personal goal is to write a great paper and the web will help me with that as well. In addition, the grammar assignment helped me to focus on the flow of my sentences so that my paper will be better in the end.
The people i commented on are as follow:
HW#4
http://corey2458.blogspot.com/2009/11/deadline-11-homework-4.html?showComment=1257661323031#c8353257896129471032
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d11-hw4-evaluate-types-of-resources.html?showComment=1257662037749#c2186124963625428665
HW#3
ttp://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d11-hw3-develop-evaluate-criteria.html?showComment=1257662165308#c8328108788839374193
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d11-hw3-develop-evaluative-criteria.html?showComment=1257662275966#c7221797709628142236

grammer assignment #5 D#11 HW#7

This week I focused on transitions. As I was writing an essay for my nutrition class, i noticed that the sentences didn't really transition well. I used a lot of also's and a lot of however's. In addition, the sentences didn't flow very well. I was disappointed when I couldn't find anything on the grammar girl website about this as I usually use this site. I did however, get some good tips from the owl at purdue. It said one trick was to refer to the last idea in the new sentence or paragraph. It also had some useful transitions and examples. I learned that it is important to use transitions to help the paper flow well. In additation, it helps the reader stay focused on the topic.
Here is the original version:
A healthful weight isn’t what is on the scale, rather the amount of body fat. The BMI is the most common way of measuring overall health, but body composition is needed for people with a lot of muscle. There are several techniques used to measure body composition, most of which do not sound appealing to me, especially the BIA in which electoral current through the body. I would probably try the bod pod as it is the most accurate and least painful.
It is most important, however, to know what the fat distribution pattern which could have an impact on health. Fluctuations in the body weight are the result of fluctuations in energy intake. I notice that when I am sick, I tend to eat less and my body is working harder than normal at rest, fighting off the bug. Because of this, I tend to lose several pounds over the duration of my sickness. This makes sense because when a person is sick, they are expending more energy than they are taking in. What I didn’t know, however, was that we use more energy at rest. I have always thought it took more energy to move around then it did to just lie quietly. I also didn’t know that 10% of our energy goes in to digesting food. I didn’t think it would take that much energy, I guess that is why I feel sleepy after eating a big meal.
Here is the revised version:
A healthful weight isn’t what is on the scale, rather the amount of body fat. The BMI, a measurement of body fat, is the most common way of measuring overall health. Although the BMI is effective for most people, body composition is needed for people with a lot of muscle. There are several techniques used to measure body composition, most of which do not sound appealing to me. The BIA sounds most painful as it is measured by an electoral current passed through the body. I would, on the other hand, probably try the bod pod as it is the most accurate measurement and least painful.
Along with body composition or BMI, it is important to know one’s fat distribution pattern as this could have an impact on health. Likewise, body weight is important in staying healthy. Fluctuations could take place with increased energy intake, but it usually only fluctuates within a 5lb range. I notice this most when I am sick. When ill, I tend to eat less when my body is working harder than normal at rest, fighting off the bug. Because of this, I tend to lose several pounds over the duration of my sickness. Consequently, when a person is sick, they are expending more energy than they are taking in. What I didn’t know, however, was that we use more energy at rest. I have always thought it took more energy to move around then it did to just lie quietly. Furthermore, I didn’t know that 10% of our energy goes into digesting food. I guess that is why I feel sleepy after eating a big meal.

draw a cluster map D#11 HW#5

I posted a small version because a larger one would not show up in my blog so I also put in the link to the website so you will be able to see what is written



http://www.gliffy.com/publish/1884084/

find additional resources D#11 HW#6

I think i have everything I need covered in my resources I have. I talked to a couple of people and they agreed that I had it covered. Of course if any of my fellow students have anything I would gladly take their comments.

evaluate types of resources D#11 HW#4

My audience would like this resource and they would find it reliable because it is a fact based science site. My audience wold just need to know what the resource since it is a well known site and the information is included in the bibliographic citation. I would just have to provide the web address for my audience in order for them to look at the resource. My situation doesn't demand that include this resource but it is important for my audience to understand the background of mad cow.

Develop Evaluative criteria D#11HW#3

1.My audience is my fellow students and my teacher. They probably want to know about my argument and my take on it. They also probably want to know some background information with they also nee to know.
2.My purpose is to figure out if the government is doing enough to protect us against mad cow. I must convey facts and my argument as well as support.
3.My research project is very much up to date. I must address current regulations and the most current cases as well as older cases and regulations. As long as my sources are with in 10 years, they are useable.
4.As I researched the topic, I was able to narrow down my question by the information I was able to gather and articles I read.
5,6. I could talk about other diseases in the beef industry but I want to focus n mad cow.

D#10 HW#14 project reflection

THe first thing I did to complete this project was to research and find sources. Then I did a short annotation for each. Then I reread through all my annotations and picked the sources that seamed most relevant. I then wrote longer annotations for each of the 8 sources I picked. If I were to do it again I might pick different sources, but I am also happy with the ones I picked. I am also happy with the steps I took in this project so I will probably use those same steps for my next project.
I am most proud that I got through this project. I have never written a paper like this before so I was not sure what to expect, or even how to do it. The only thing that concerns me about the next project is not knowing where to start or how to do it. However, I tried my best and got some advice from Summer that really helped. If I had more time I would like other classmates to review my paper and give me more things i could do to make it better.
I didn't get much from turnitin.com but Summer really gave me some great tips that helped me go back and revise and add to my paper.
What I specifically worked on this week was just trying to do the assignment write since this is my first time doing something like this. However with the helpful tips and learning as I went, I felt I succeeded in writing my first review of research.I believe i achieve one of my course goals of writing this paper because I did it. I tried and revised and wrote and revised, and revised some more. I think for my next writing project, my goal will be to get an A and to write an interesting paper.

practice in-text citations D#10 HW#11

After the first quote:
(8.Howard Strauss, "Why Many")
After second sentence:
(7. Don Quick and Timothy Gray Davies, "Community College" )
After Fourth Sentence:
(6. Alma R. Clayton-Pedersen and Nancy O'Neill, "Curricula Designed")
Footnote:
Alma R. Clayton-Pendersen and Nancy O'Neill " Curricula Designed to Meet 21st-Century Expectations"; Don Quick and Timothy Gray Davies "Community College Faculty Development:Bringing Technology into Instruction"; Howard Strauss " Why Many Faculty Members Aren't Excited about Technology"

understand your warrants D#10 HW#10

Yes it includes a reason and claim and they do connect. I think my audience will agree. The evidence I have is pretty compelling and my argument is pretty solid.

construct an argument D#10 HW#9

Is the government doing enough to protect the American people and stop the spread of mad cow?
The government needs to better regulate the beef industry to protect the American people from man cow.
Ethos: I base my claims on facts and back them up with facts. Yes my audience will find it to be persuasive. By only stating backed up facts, it demonstrates my credibility as an author.
Pathos: I will appeal to the fact that it could happen to my audience or their friends or family. Since these questions will get them thinking, it will be persuasive. Logos: I will use a lot of facts and research in my paper. This will make it persuasive and make my audience believe what I am saying.
I got really confused with the rest of the outline. Outlines don't help me write. If I do an outline I get bored and my writing gets sloppy and boring. I like to just write my paper then go back and organize my paper. I also go back and make sure all of the requirements are covered so that it is a good argument.

develop emotional arguments D#10 HW#8

I am interested in diseases so i like my topic. Getting a good grade motivates me to keep going.
My topic is interesting to my classmates, so they have said. It doesn't affect their finances. I'm sure my audience eats beef so it affects the way they eat. The same with their friends and family.
I don't think it affects their employment but they might not apply to these beef factories after reading my essay.

develop your authorial ethos D#10 HW#7

I know that mad cow is spread through feeding cows meat and I know it can be passed to humans. I also know that there haven't been a lot of cases in humans, but once a cow or human gets it, it kills them.
All I know about my audience is that they are in the same English class as I am.
All of my resources are credible and several are experts in their topic.
All of my audience will be more likely persuaded by credibility then anything else.

Draft a thesis statement D#10 HW#6

Is the United States government doing enough to protect the American people and stop the spread of mad cow?

-The government needs to better regulate the farming industry.

-it would stop the spread of it and keep americans from getting it.

The United States government needs to better regulate the beef industry to stop the spread of mad cow and keep Americans safe.

create a cluster map D#10 HW#5

Is the government doing enough to protect American people and stop the spread of mad cow?
Yes, No, to a degree, to much
I am completing this research for my research paper.
I would cross off no and too much
Yes "to a degree" would probably be most feasible to my audience. My teacher and fellow students will read my research. Most of my research agrees that the government is doing a lot to protect us but isn't doing a lot to stop the spread of it. I think this is the angle I will pursue in my argument.

essay discussion D#10 HW#3

I liked this essay. I thought it flowed well and that it had good voice to it. The author used the resources to their full advantage. The paper was clearly bias to that fact that teenagers are responsible and was in favor of them voting. However, if I was to revise and edit this. I would have mentioned why teenagers are not allowed to vote to day and why people in power do not let teenagers vote. He briefly mentions that people think teenagers are not well versed on the issues, but i think he should have elaborated on this a bit. If I was writing the essay, I would have chosen the other side of the argument because I believe teenagers are not educated enough to vote.

define the rehorticle situation D#10 HW#4

Is our government doing enough to protect us from mad cow?
My purpose of writing this is to educate on mad cow. It is also to raise questions of security on our food system. I chose this particular disease because not a lot is known about it and I am interested in learning more about it myself.
My audience is my fellow students and my teacher.
I find my self mistrusting the government so i might be bias as to weather or not they are doing a good enough job at protecting us.
My questions overlap in my interest in the subject as well as my enthusiasm in sharing it with others. This well help me to write a paper I enjoy as well as one others will enjoy.

Reflection D#9HW#8

This week i learned how to properly write a review of research paper. Since that is one of the course competencies, I feel like this weeks assignment on peer editing was very helpful. It also helped me achieve my personal goal to write a research review this week.I like peer editing. I find it very helpful when you have no clue what you are doing.
The only persons whose blog i could comment on was Summers because she is the only one who had the work done.
HW#3
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d9-hw3-introduce-secondary-resources.html?showComment=1256430059047#c601376365684437
HW#4
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d9-hw5-decide-which-citation-style-to.html?showComment=1256430309641#c6511815142645733402

Grammer Assignment #4 D#9HW#7

THis week i decided to work on my commas. I wanted to work on commas this week because I either tend to over use or under use them. The grammer girl site was helpful. She had a whole article dedicated to the topic which I found very interestring. A great tip I learned is to say the sentence out loud and if you pause, there will most likely be a comma there. Also, commas go after transition words and side notes. I chose a paragraph from a lab write up.
Initial:
My hypothesis if plants don’t receive the proper nutrients then they will experience deficiency symptoms, was mostly supported. Plant one the control plant was supposed to be the tallest healthiest plant out of them all but it was only of medium height and had signs of death. Plant six was not supposed to die and it did, so we can’t really analyze it properly. The graph was also off the scale. Because plant one was not the tallest all of the percentages were extremely high in the comparison graph. These errors could be due to measurement errors by the students orit could be the plants weren’t cared for properly, or we could have just gotten a bad batch of plants.
Revised:
My hypothesis, if plants don’t receive the proper nutrients, then they will experience deficiency symptoms, was mostly supported. Plant one, the control plant, was supposed to be the tallest, healthiest plant out of them all but, it was only of medium height and had signs of death. Plant six was not supposed to die and it did, so we can’t really analyze it properly. The graph was also off the scale. Because plant one was not the tallest, all of the percentages were extremely high in the comparison graph. These errors could be due to measurement errors by the students, it could be the plants weren’t cared for properly, or we could have just gotten a bad batch of plants.

Peer review reflection D#9HW#6

http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d8-hw7-wp2-rough-draft.html?showComment=1256425619585#c6557940781374582772
The above link is the person I peer edited. I could only do one, since she was the only one to have her rough draft completed. I learned how to wright a research review from editing Summer's. She understood the assignment and wrote a beautiful review. I need to add to mine and I need to explain what each source is and the credentials and why it is a good source for my paper. Turnitin.com didn't suggest any changes for me and i didn't get any comments on my blog either. However, i still need to add some things to my paper and edit it before i turn it in.

decide which citation to use D#9 HW#4

My topic is the prevention of mad cow. Most of the sources I have gathered have used MLA if they are citing something. My audience will be expecting me to use MLA format in my research paper. I will be shearing my work online in my blog and sending it via turnitin.com to my teacher. Some of the publishers have their own guidelines, some don't.

Introduce secondary resources D#9 HW#3

This resource will be helpful in my argument because it gives the information i need to back up my statements and arguments. It also gives the background information that i need to write the paper. There are three authors for this article, however the audience will not know who they are. The authors all have strong credentials so they are very reliable.

Reflection D#8HW#9

I felt that this weeks reading and book assignments were a repeat of last week. I felt myself answering the same questions both weeks and I don't feel this weeks reading helped me at all. I got really confused when it came to writing my resource review, however, and hope that next week i will get peer edited and be able to see more examples of what I am supposed to do.
The people i commented on are:
HW#4
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/10/d8-hw4-track-bibliographic-information.html?showComment=1255852625949#c5964919403760048708
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d8-hw4-track-bibliographic-information.html?showComment=1255852882613#c7991855867974034286
HW#9
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d8-hw9-reflect.html?showComment=1255853492546#c7825028949470629301
HW#6
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/10/d8-hw6-make-cover-sheets.html?showComment=1255853614469#c6499974719953806588

cover sheets D#8HW#6

Date Found: October 15, 2009
Title: "How Mad Cow Disease Works."
Web Site:Howstuffworks.com
Author: Craig Freudenrich,Ph.D.
Publisher: HowStuffWorks.com.
Publication Date:March 8, 2001
URL:http://health.howstuffworks.com/mad-cow-disease.htm
This website page says what it is, how BSE works. (i.e. the science behind how it affects the body)
Yes Verification
This resource will help me answer my question of how it works.
I only have computer copies because I don't like wasting paper and I don't have a printer.
This author has a Ph.D. so he obviously spent a lot of time researching the subject. He is backed by a major science website. The author is trying to provide information. The audience is the public. He wrote his paper easy to understand by anyone interested in science because that is who his audience is.
This resource answers how BSE effects the body. It is a different then the other resources but it connects with all of them
Yes this is a logical resource. Yes the methods are similar to the other resources.
Date Found: October 3, 2009.
Name of article:How The Cows Turned Mad
Website:UC
Author: Maxime Schwartz
Publisher:UofC
Publication Date:2003
Name of Database:E-Brary
URL:http://site.ebrary.com.ezp.mc.maricopa.edu/lib/mesa/docDetail.action?docID=10057082&p00=mad cow
This article gives a history on BSE.
Yes verified
It is very useful to answer my question on background information.
Only computer copy.
She is backed by a prestigious university so she is very credible.She wrote this to inform. She wrote this book specifically for students and because of this, she wrote it with an academic perspective.
It answers my question of where it came from. Again, it meshed with my other resources, even though it gave me different information.
Yes it is logical. And yes the methods are similar.

evaluate validity D#8HW#5

Yes i can easily identify the claim and evidence in this resource. Yes the evidence supports his claim. There are many other reliable sources I have looked into that states the same and also he gives scientific proof and he backs up all of his claims. He did use some of the similar methods. I stated exactly how BSE worked nothing more. Other sources stated how it worked, but they didn't go in to as much detail because they also talked about other aspects of BSE.

Track biblographic information D#8HW#4

The authors are all masters in their fields in agriculture. They are backed and published by a prestigious university and have excellent credentials. the name of the article is "Bovine Spongiform Encephalopathy" amd it was published in March 2004 and I accessed it on October 14, 2009. I found this article when I searched Google for "BSE" and came from the NDSU website.

Reviwe of research D#8 HW#7

I know I am missing siome sources, but I wasnt sure at all how to do this i was very confused. I on only three sources because I didnt want to write all 8 then go back an have to redo 8. I hope to look at examples from the class to help me and i hope all of my class mates and teacher will help me by peer editing! Please and thankyou!
-April

Throughout American history, beef has been a major food source. Today, we consume about 65 pounds per person per year. It is important that Americans realize that risk comes with eating meat. BSE(mad cow) is one of those diseases associated with beef. Although there hasn’t been a case of it reported in America yet, the risk is still there. BSE is an infection that starts in cows and is then is transferred to humans through the consumption of brain and spinal tissue. I want to explore the infection itself as well as to explore the issue of whether or not our government is doing enough to protect us. Some think that mad cow can be prevented and since there hasn’t been a case in America, our government is doing a great job. Others however, believe that since there are still cases, even if not in America, there needs to be more done to protect the people.
Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D. "Bovine Spongiform Encephalopathy." North Dakota State University. NDSU, Mar. 2004. Web. 14 Oct. 2009. .
This is all of the how, what, why, of BSE. They don’t really describe any argument they just give the facts about it. This is an extremely important source. It will give me all of the background I need for my research.
Lutey, Tom. "Beef Rule Could Get Stricter." Tribune Business News [Washington] 20 Mar. 2009. ProQuest. Web. 3 Oct. 2009.
As long as Americans continue to eat meat, we will have a need for rules to protect us from food borne illness. Tom Lutey reports in his article that these rules keep getting stricter. However, he argues that even with this new rule, the regulations still are not strict enough. He gives a couple of example of things farmers should not be doing, and they are still getting away with.
Thomas Ropp. (2001, March 12).

HEALTH PILLS COULD CARRY 'MAD COW'

. Arizona Republic,p. E.1. Retrieved October 11, 2009, from Arizona Republic. (Document ID: 1842321171).
Do you know what’s in your diet pills? According to Thomas Ropp, it could be mad cow. He states that even though the US has many regulations on beef, it has very few on diet pills. This is a dangerous concept. Americans could be taking something they think is healthy, when it could contain one of the deadliest diseases known to man. He suggests that the government is letting this fly by and something needs to be done about it. He feels it is important that Americans know what they are taking in. He also feels that if an American does get sick, then the government is going to have that life on their shoulders.

annotated bib D#8 HW#3

Are dairy products a danger?

(2004, January 3). Arizona Republic,p. B.8. Retrieved October 15, 2009, from Arizona Republic. (Document ID: 1814105431).
When reading this article I was shocked to learn that BSE could be transmitted through milk. I will however have to check in to this as i have never heard that, but if i find this fact to check out, this will be a good resource.

"BSE Information." US Depatment of Health and Human Services. FDA, 6 Aug. 2009. Web. 15 Oct. 2009. .
Since the FDA has all the information about food borne illnesses, I figured this was a good website to visit. It had all kinds of information I could use in my paper. Of course it is a reliable source because it is the US government, although some would argue that is why it is not reliable, this organization is straight with the facts.

Fernau, Karen. "ARIZONA BEEF EATERS NOT FEARFUL OF MAD COW." Proquest. 7 Jan. 2004. Web. 15 Oct. 2009. .
I found this article to be informative. It basically just states that Arizona's residents are not fearful because the infected cows from Washington were not shipped here. It also states that loopholes are allowing cows to be fed nerve and bone tissue of other cows which spreads the infection. I will be using this to answer the question of weather the government is doing enough to protect us.

Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D. "Bovine Spongiform Encephalopathy." North Dakota State University. NDSU, Mar. 2004. Web. 14 Oct. 2009. .
In this article, three different people answer the what, how, why questions of BSE (mad cow). Each author is an expert in their respective fields, all in the farming industry, and they speak for a prestigious university. Since they answer all of the basic questions needed for my paper, I will be using their explanations in answering those what, how , why questions.

Reflection d#7 hw#12

I liked the reading this week. It helped me to assess weather my resources were credible or not. This information is always important to know when writing a paper. If your resource isn't credible then is your paper? I would think not. I will use this is future papers to make sure my resources are crediable so my paper is through and crediable.
The only blog I could comment on is summers an hell if i know so here are the links to those:
D#7 HW#7
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d7-hw7-annotate-resouce.html?showComment=1255244669911#c5023346288369594714
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/10/d7-hw7-annotate-resource.html?showComment=1255244785448#c8190650835505151365
D#7HW#5
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d7-hw5-are-you-reading-purposefully-or.html?showComment=1255244941400#c2310540129544
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/10/d7-hw5-are-you-reading-purposefully-or.html?showComment=1255245016564#c2166812306382673950

Annotated BIb D#7HW#10

Linda Valdez. (2008, May 4).

Benefits of Factory Farms Just Illusions

. Arizona Republic,p. V.1. Retrieved October 11, 2009, from Arizona Republic. (Document ID: 1705182831).
This article tells how small farmers get along with their food animals. It states how they treat their animals with respect and even kill them humanly. This article is from a well known newspaper and it gives personal testimony which can be a good thing to use in an article. It also talks about both sides of the argument, even though it is a clearly bias opinion. This is a great article to use in my paper. I would use it to show that treating animals with respect doesn't cost more because many other farms do it. Small farms are cost efficient, so we know if they can do it so can the large companies.
Linda Valdez. (2004, July 4).

KNOW WHAT'S IN THE HAMBURGER YOU'RE GRILLING?

Arizona Republic,p. V.3. Retrieved October 11, 2009, from Arizona Republic. (Document ID: 1805774931).
THis article talks about free range animals. This author is clearly bias toward free renge animals and backs she statements up with facts. This is a reliable source. I will use it to prove my point of cost efficiency and humane treatment.
Thomas Ropp. (2001, March 12).

HEALTH PILLS COULD CARRY 'MAD COW'

. Arizona Republic,p. E.1. Retrieved October 11, 2009, from Arizona Republic. (Document ID: 1842321171).
This article states that cow brains are being put in to dietary supplements. This is exactly the article i need to show how unsuspecting BSE cam be. Its a reliable source because she backs up her statements as well as testimony and information about it.
LARRY McDONALD. (2001, April 16).

VIGILANCE KEEPS HERDS DISEASE-FREE

. Arizona Republic,p. B.7. Retrieved October 11, 2009, from Arizona Republic. (Document ID: 1842117921).
This article talks about all the preventative measures that the US government has put in place to prevent BSE here. This is another article this is excellent for my paper. I will use it to answer the question of weather our government is doing enough.

Grammer assignment#3 D#7 HW#11

This week I decided to focus on wording. I sometimes use the wrong word or the wrong tense of a word, or I word my paper in such a way that the sentence doesn't make sense. For my editing this week, I chose a paragraph from an essay i wrote on the Vietnam war.
Original:
One night when Larry was in Vietnam, he was supposed to be on guard duty, which is basically just watching the outside of the camp for the enemy. This is a normal job that Larry had done several times before, so he wasn’t thinking anything of it. He reported for duty but the captain said that there were plenty of people so Larry’s services were not needed. Larry thought someone must have taken his place, so he went back to his tent to sleep. He said three men served on guard duty that night. The Vietcong attacked their camp that night and all three men were killed. If Larry had been serving that night, he would have been the one killed and I would not be here to tell his story, for that man, Larry Boyd, is my dad.
Revised:
Larry was scheduled to be on guard duty one night, a job in which his only task was to watch the outside of the camp for the enemy. This is a normal job that Larry had done several times before, so he wasn’t thinking anything of it. He reported for duty, but oddly the officer in charge told Larry that another person was taking that shift so Larry’s services were not needed. Larry just went back to his tent to sleep after a hard day of work. Larry said three men served on guard duty that night. The Vietcong attacked the station that night and all three men were killed. If Larry had been stationed that night, he would have been the one killed and I would not be here to tell his story, for that man, Larry Boyd, is my dad.
I went to the dailywritingtips.com web site and got a few tips on how to word properly. Basically you just have to read it out loud to know if it sounds good. If you can say it without a problem, then your sentence is fine.

Take detailed notes D#7HW#9

This is basically an annotated biblography all over again. I have already annotated all of my resources> All of my resources are good resources and i have already paraphrased all of them. They are all credable and they are picked specifically by me for the information that i could use in my paper.

Summerize your resource D#7HW#8

The article in the Tribune talked about how the beef laws as they are now are not good enough. A new law is proposed in which all beef is to be kept under even stricter supervision in order to prevent people from getting sick. Beef will not come from outside the united states because most tainted beef comes from other countries. Some people support this ban and agree it is safer.

The complete ban is likely to hurt smaller ranches and feedlots, who survive on small profit margins, Bullard said. The cost of losing an otherwise healthy animal to injury could hurt small operators, who the USDA says accounts for 95 percent of slaughtered downer cows, believed to number about 1,500 annually.

If there is a complete ban of downer cattle, it would hurt small ranchers because they make up about 95% of slaughtered cattle.
I think it would be best to paraphrase here.

annotate a resource D#7HW#7

Maxime Schwartz is the authr and this is a good resource because a well known university i the publisher. The purpose of the text is to inform and students are the intended audience. The major claim is that mad cow is caused by a virus. She doesn't really give any resources in her paper only a link to many different sights that could help if one was going to research further on the subject. She has scientific evidence to back up her claims. She gives facts and numbers and studies to provide support. This resource will be very useful and it fits perfectly in with all my other sources.

Situate a Resource Rhetorically D#7HW#6

He has a PH.D in his field so he knows what he is talking about. He is affiliated with Howstuffworks.com, which is a well known science site and it is known for its truthful information. The author is trying to provide information about mad cow disease. The information in the article and the title gave me the clues about what the author was trying to do. The article is written in easy to understand terms so the audience is clearly the public. Also, the web sight is for the public so that is evidence that it is written for the public.

are you reading purposefuly or rhetorically D#7 HW#5

The only things I have read in the past few days are my english reading assignment, and my facebook page. The goal in reading my english book was to complete the assignment, my facebook was to see what my friends were up to. The goal I had for reading my english was to complete the assignment. I didn't pay attention to the rhetorical elements, i was just paying attention to the information. Understanding the rhetorical information didnt make any difference in larning the material.

I commented on the following:
D#6 HW#3:
http://corey2458.blogspot.com/2009/10/d6-hw3.html?showComment=1254636998382#c2593306296884570552
http://klindenberg.blogspot.com/2009/10/d6-hw3-will-distance-learning-replace.html?showComment=1254637162311#c141194400383545567
D#6HW#5:
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d6-hw5-alternative-key-words-and-list.html?showComment=1254637303195#c2086317285258558
http://klindenberg.blogspot.com/2009/10/d6-hw5-list-alternative-key-words-write.html?showComment=1254637453442#c8009109807510477290
D#6 HW#8:
http://corey2458.blogspot.com/2009/10/d6-hw8.html?showComment=1254637600280#c7842955135423096033
http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/10/d6-hw8-whats-your-plan-what-does-your.html?showComment=1254637907501#c4638652278436
this weeks work helped me achieve my goal of turning a good research proposal. Since I have never written one before it really helped me learn how to wright one. I really didn't learn a lot about research since I've been doing it for a while, but i guess it refreshed my memory. Until next week..

WP#1 Reflection D#6 HW#11

The first thing i did in completing this prodject was to brainstorm. I then wrote what ever came to mind. I then went through and put alike paragraphs together and made sure the sentences when together. I then waited a week and revised and edited the paper and had a friend do it for me to. I then revised a third time and added a title. I dont think I would do anything differently next time because this process worked well for me and I will probably use this same process on the next writing assignment.
I am most proud of the whole thing. I think it turned out nicely. My only concern is that I missed something. I did however, revisit the assignment criteria and made sure it matched. If I had more time i would probably ask others opinions to make sure it matched the criteria. I didn't revise my worked biased on turnitin.com because i only had a 1% match and that was a technical term so I felt I didn't need to revise because of that. I worked on spelling for this project. I think it helped me be more careful because when i revised, and even while writing i was specifically looking out for my spelling. I think for the next project I will work on sentence structure just to make some improvements. The course outcome i was leaning towards was to get an A in the class. However, I became really interested in my subject and when that happened, I started writing because i wanted everyone else to be interested in my subject too. I did feel I achieved this goal because everyone was leaving comments on how they couldn't wait to read my paper. I think my next outcome will be for everyone to understand my opinion and to lean towards it as well. But if not, an A is always nice. ;)

Editing Stragities D#6 HW#9

I used three of the stratigies listed on the websites to proof read my paper. I used read out loud, know what you are looking for, and edit with a partner. These strategies all worked well for me as you will be able to see in the revised version of my paper.

Annotated biblography D#6HW#7

Walters, Mark J. Six Modern Plagues: And How We Are Causing Them. Island press, 2004. E-brary. Web. 3 Oct. 2009. .
This book has six different diseases but i want to focus on mad cow. It tells a story about the discovery of mad cow and how the first case of mad cow.It also tells many facts about it. This is a great resource to use because it is in the MCC library under non fiction, and it wasn't written too long ago. It is also a popular work so i would say it is a reliable source. This resource will help me answer the question of wht is it and where it came from and even how it spreads.
Schwartz, Maxime. How The Cows Turned Mad. University of California, 2003. E-brary. Web. 3 Oct. 2009. .
This book also has many different diseases but the chapter on mad cow talks about where it came from and how it was discovered. However, what makes it different is that it talks about weather or not mad cow is serous. It gives excellent examples of cases of mad cow as well. This is a crediable resource because it comes forom a well known university. Although it is a little older, it is still an excellent resource. I plan to use this in a section of my paper that discusses wheather or not this is a serious problem. I also will use the cases of mad cow as examplesin my paper.
Lutey, Tom. "Beef Rule Could Get Stricter." Tribune Business News [Washington] 20 Mar. 2009. ProQuest. Web. 3 Oct. 2009. .
This article talked about how cows are treated and what they considered "safe" before. It then goes on to say that the rules were to lax and that the FDA wants to issue stricter rules reguarding beef. This is a crediable sourse because it is a well known newspaper. I will use this article when i talk about if our governmet is doing enough to protect us.
Freudenrich, Ph.D., Craig. "How Mad Cow Disease Works." 08 March 2001. HowStuffWorks.com. 03 October 2009.
This site gave all the little details about mad cow. It ives facts on where it comes from and what it is and how it works. This site is crediable because it is a well known science site and it even has its own tv show. also the author has a Ph.D which means he has spent years learning about his subject. I will use this in my paper in the paragraph of what mad cow is and what i does.

What does your research plan look like?D#6 HW#8

I need to collect data on what the disease is, how it is spread, the symptoms, and how to prevent it. The resources i need are periodicals, and scientific research. I will start my search in the e-brary of the schools online data base. I will also search well known science sites like discovery.com, sciencedaily.com, scientificamerican.com to get information. I will also go to the MCC library to try and find some books on the subject. I cant really give a time line because I am a "seize the day" kind of a person and i do things when i have the time. I do however, plant to get things done by the deadlines the teacher gives us.

Review of essay D#6HW#3

I didn't find this piece very interesting. However, I like how he used progression through history in his paper. It was a cool to see how things progressed through time. It is a nice layout of the paper which I might consider using in my own. It is a little bit of an example of what we are doing for WP#3, however it didn't cover all of he criteria. He never said how he was going to use these sources in his paper or even how they applied to his paper. This wasn't in an annotated bibliography format at all. If I was going to revise it, I would tell what my resources are and how I would use them in my paper.

Search a virarity of resourced D#6 HW#6

The internet is always the best place to start. However, I don't think there are very many blogs that are discussing my topic so those wont be helpful. I could use news related web sites to help since mad cow is all over the news. Browsing through periodicals could also help me know where to look and help me to make sure that there is enough information about my topic to do a research paper on. I think the best resources for me to use are video files,books, periodicals, and the web. I will find the best resources on the web because the web has all these. I think the best static resources are books and web sites. The best syndicated resource for me would be periodicals. I don't really think dynamic resources will work for me. I will base the credibility on where the information is located and how old the information is and if it is a well know resource that is known to be credible. I also like what the book said about asking your self the questions about the resource. I will make sure to ask those questions for my resources to make sure they are credible.

Key Words D#6HW#5

Keywords: mad cow, abuse, humans, disease
These words will work well because they are the bases for my topic so I am sure these words are the best for my topic.
Word that wont work: animal, meat, health
I know these are the least likely to work because these are o general of words by them selves and they could rout me to many other things that i don't want to.
Terms for a search: mad cow, disease, abuse, humas
Terms i have found: transfer, warning signs, symptoms, illness, concerns, help

primary or secondary Research? D#6 HW#4

Purpose: I want my readers to think about what they are eating and which companies are known for "healthy" beef so they will eat that beef instead of tainted beef. For this research I plan to use secondary research because if I went to the beef companies themselves they would just lie and say they dont abuse thei animals and that their beef is safe.
Audience:I think cold hard acts are the most convincing. Scientific research will be the best for my paper. The specific research of secondary. Testimonies are not facts they are just opinions. Every one has their own opinion so facts are the best for my paper.
Topic/question: The information i need to answer my question is contained in secondary research only.
Author: I have several weeks to complete the assignment. I have access to the internet with holds all of the information I need, however if I need to I can use the MCC library. I don't really have access to anyone to help me with my research since most meat farms are out of the country. It looks like I will be conducting secondary research all the way.

Reflection D#5 HW#9

I posted to Summer's "English 102 Blog" and Andres Cox's blog. This weeks topic, conducting research, has really helped prepare me for my paper. It had nice tips, like decide what data to collect, that really helped me out. This week I learned how to better organize my research and I also learned how to peer edit, something I haven't really done much before. I also got peer edited which will help me make my paper better to :)

D#5HW#8 Grammer assignment #2

This week I chose to focus on staying in the right tense. I have a tendency of useing past tense when i should be using present, and vise versa.I checked out the grammer girl website because I find the tricks there very easy to understand and use. Here is the original paragraph from the research proposal:


What does this have to do with a research paper? Well, I have been researching for a while the reasons behind why farm animals are abuses. Mostly it is because large dairies and farms just don’t care about the animals, they care about the money they make. Because of this selfish attitude, we have many humans getting sick due to meat and animal product illnesses. One of the most well known diseases is known as bovine spongiform encephalopathy, commonly known as mad cow disease.

Here is the revised paragraph:
What does this have to do with a research paper? Well, I had been researching the topic of farm animal abuse before i decided to write a research paper. I found that most of the abuse was because large dairies and farms just didn't care about the animals, they cared only for the money they made off of them. Because of this selfish attitude, we have had many humans get sick due to meat and animal product illness. One of the most well known of these diseases is the bovine spongiform encephalopathy, commonly known as mad cow disease.

One of the tricks I learned is just to say the sentence out loud. This way you can hear what it sounds like and its easier to hear the mistakes. Another trick is to use the finder to find all the haves and hads in the paragraph and change it all to one tense.

annotated bib D#5HW#7

Madcow Disease and US Beef Industry. Korean National Broadcasting. Google Video. Web. 25 Sept. 2009. .
This video was all about Mad Cow Disease and the scare of it. It was a documentary that depicted abuse of cows and many other horrific pictures. Korea dosnt let just anything on TV. This is a respectable source because it is a news compant and they show a lot of evidence and the facts they state correspond to facts known and researched. This will help me show how these cows are abused and it could be because of this problem that mad cow even exists.
"Undercover Video of Mistrested Cows Released." Dailymotion. Tech & Science. Dailymotion. 30 Nov. 2007. Web. 25 Sept. 2009. .
This site also shows mistreatment of dairy cows. This is a short clip showing brutal things that the ranchers do to these animals. I will use this to show my bias and make people understand where i am coming from.

Decide what data to collect D#5HW#6

The activities pertaining to my research is eating beef and cattle abuse. Observing a sick cow or human infected with the disease would help me with my research. I couldn't participate in getting the disease nor would I want to, I do however eat beef all the time so I can relate that experience. Talking to experts would help, because they know about the disease first hand. However, I could probably gain just as much information surfing the net as i could talking to people, because people don't always tell the truth, and plus, people that have this disease are already dead. The only survey i could think of would be one about meat eaters. This survey was already done and i plan on using it in my paper already.

Peer reviews D#5 HW#4

This is the first paper i peer reviewed:
http://klindenberg.blogspot.com/2009/09/d4-hw9-rough-draft-wp1.html?showComment=1253927277736#c3874602272790746836
and the second
http://andrescox.blogspot.com/2009/09/d4-hw9-wp1-draft.html?showComment=1253929894542#c1319497494626068216
After reading other peoples drafts and reviewing them, I learned that the easiest way to review is to write notes as you go along, and not to look at just mistakes, but to look at the content as well. For my own draft, I need to add how i am going to conduct research as well as to add descrpitive words to my paper. I also learned that it is important to tell the author when you are confused about something and give comments on how they might make their paper better. If we only said good things about each others paper, we wouldn't know what needs to be fixed. Summer reviewed my paper and had alot of questions. The only problem is that i planned on answering her questions in the research paper itself, but i think i might state this in my paper, just so everyone will want to read it. SHe id however, give me some more ideas of what to write about in my paper, with what she wanted to know more about. My report was only a 1% match. This is because it is a common virus and a lot of people have to explain what it is after they put in a name people wont recognize. However, i do have some editing to do before i turn my paper in. I will probably add some more to it to clear up questions people might have.

Paragraph analysis D#5 HW#3

What is the point of the paragraph?
1.It is the introduction to the paper.
2 &3. It is the background behind why i want to focus on this topic.
4.This paragraph is used to state mt topic.
5. This paragraph is used to show how it relates to all of us.
6.The point of this paragraph is to propose what issue I am going to write about, what my opinion is on the subject and also what questions I plan to research about.
How does the paragraph function in the argument?
Paragraphs 1-4 are used to set up my argument. Paragraph five is used to reaffirm why said argument is important.Paragraph six states my argument and my opinion on the issue.
How does the paragraph function in the paper as a whole?
This is where my thesis statement can be found and it is the conclusion to my paper.
How does the paragraph relate to the paragraph above?How does the paragraph relate to the paragraph above?How does the paragraph relate to the paragraph below? How does the paragraph transition to the paragraph above? How does the paragraph transition to the paragraph below?
Paragraph two is the story I transitioned to from paragraph one. Paragraph three is the ending of the story from paragraph two. Paragraph four explains the reason for the story in paragraph three. Paragraph five explains the subject brought up in paragraph four. Paragraph six reaffirms the explanation in paragraph five. Paragraph one is the opener so in order to have a paper,and that is the introduction for paragraph two. Paragraph two is the first part of the story in paragraph one. Paragraph three is and explanation of paragraph four. Paragraph four shows why the subject from three was important. Paragraph five is the why behind the topic in paragraph six.

Reflection d#4 HW#12

THis week really helped me achieve the goal for module #1. THe ultimate goal is to right a research proposal. Well this week we had to write up a draft so we are most of the way toward that goal. I learn by doing so as i was writing the proposal i learned how to write one. I have never had to write a proposal before and now , with practice, i am confident i will be abe to write them in the future. THe people i comented on are as follows:
K. Lindenberg hw#4-5
Andreas cox hw#4,8
Corey Palmer hw #3
Summer Bretz hw4

Research proposal D#4 HW#9

This is my research proposal peer reviews are welcome and requested thank you to anyone that will review it and i will also be happy to review any of your's:

I have always loved animals. Ever since I was a little girl I have wanted to be a veterinarian. I had this doctor play set that I would use to “fix” my sick stuffed animals. I also used to wander around the neighborhood playing with all of the neighbor’s animals. I have never even thought of a different job I could ever do when I “grow up” besides taking care of animals. However, it wasn’t until high school that I discovered which type I truly loved best.

I was in my junior year of high school when I decided it would be fun to take an animal science class. Not only did it fill a science requirement, it would be a fun class since it was all about animals. In this class, we were given a project. The teacher had saved some baby bulls from a dairy where they were basically thrown away. These bulls were skinny from starvation and sick from who knows what. The farmers refused to give these babies any food since the bulls were of no use to the farmers. The farmers just took them and threw them out back to die. Now since they had a large dairy, no legal action was taken against them. But thankfully for the baby cows my teacher saved them.

Each of the students, including myself, were given one of these calves to take care of and try to nurse back to health. I was excited because this is the kind of thing I wanted to do when I “grew up”. I took care of the bull yo the best of my ability. I went to that farm every day and night to feed that bull ( I even gave it the name of “Little Moo”), I played with it and walked it, and I even gave it shots of antibiotics and had to give it pills to help it get better ( as I explained earlier, these bulls were in bad shape). After about a month, I am sad to say that Little Moo, as well as many of the other baby bulls died, due to the illnesses they received from the dairy. This experience inspired me to pursue a degree in large animal veterinary medicine. And, after earning my degree, I plan to open a rescue center for abused and abandoned farm animals.

What does this have to do with a research paper? Well, I have been researching for a while the reasons behind why farm animals are abuses. Mostly it is because large dairies and farms just don’t care about the animals, they care about the money they make. Because of this selfish attitude, we have many humans getting sick due to meat and animal product illnesses. One of the most well known diseases is known as bovine spongiform encephalopathy, commonly known as mad cow disease.

Since mad cow disease is a food borne illness, it does not affect everyone. Vegans and vegetarians have nothing to worry about since they don’t eat meat. However, it was found that the average American consumes 67lbs of beef per year (Economic research service). Why so much? It is easy to get, very tasty, cheap, and an American classic. When we thing American food what is the first thing we usually think of? Grilled hamburgers and frenchfrys. By serving this tasty American classic, Mc Donald’s has become the number one fast food company in the world with over $23,522.4M in sales, 32,000 restaurants (14,000 of which are in America) in 120 different countries and 400,000 employees (answers.com). There is hardly a kid in America who doesn’t know what the golden arches mean. Parents love it because it is cheap and easy. If they are tired after work and don’t feel like cooking, they just buy their kid a happy meal for three bucks. If you are a college kid on a budget, you can go to Mickey D’s and get a burger for a buck versus the three bucks for a little parfait at the campus cafeteria. And it’s not just Mc Donald’s with cheap beef. There are other fast food restaurants including Arby’s, Taco Bell, burger king, Wendy’s, and Filaburtos just to name a few. There are thousands of people eating at these places every day. Can you imagine if one of these places received beef tainted with mad cow disease?

This issue affects us all. I, like most of my fellow students, am beef eater. I only eat it a couple times a month, but once is all it takes. This is an issue that has an effect on all of us. You might not be a meat eater yourself, but I am sure you have a friend or family member that enjoys beef. We might wonder is beef safe at all? In my opinion, it is safe, depending on where it comes from and what part of the cow is consumed. I also believe that mad cow wouldn’t be a problem if farmers took care of their cows properly and the FDA did their jobs correctly. There wouldn’t be cases of mad cow in humans if the FDA put certain regulations in place and checked ALL meat properly before it was given to consumers. However, it is the belief of others that mad cow is strictly a disease in which cows get naturally and there is no way to prevent them from getting it. I plan to research the subject fully and present the facts and statements for both sides of this argument as well as to answer the following questions:

-What is mad cow disease?

-How do cows get it?

-How is it transmitted to humans?

-How does this disease affect humans and cows alike?

-What, if anything, can be done to prevent this epidemic?