Yes it includes a reason and claim and they do connect. I think my audience will agree. The evidence I have is pretty compelling and my argument is pretty solid.
My specialty is taking comfort food and making a tasty vegan version, but I also enjoy creating "healthy" recipes and other yummy treats. I will be sharing new recipes that I try, some I come up with, as well as culinary tips, product and restaurant reviews, and little blurbs now and again on fitness and trying to stay healthy in the city. Being a personal trainer, it is important for me to stay happy and healthy and help others do the same!
I like your thesis and I think it's fine the way it is. The only thing that I could suggest is maybe adding the reason to your claim......?
ReplyDeletesounds like you are very confident, wish i was as sure of my paper
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