D#13 HW#5 grammer assignment #5

This week i chose to work on my people tense. I am known for useing alot of "you"s in my paper. I know that is not good writing that instead you are supposed to use "one" or people or something to that nature. I also chose my research paper because i want a good grade on it. I used the daily writing tips web site which said to put one inplace of you and to make sure its himself or herself that goes along with "one" and not "themselve."
Orig:Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect the people. For one, the US government has “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).
Revised:
Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect her. For one, the US government “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).