Grammer Assignment #4 D#9HW#7

THis week i decided to work on my commas. I wanted to work on commas this week because I either tend to over use or under use them. The grammer girl site was helpful. She had a whole article dedicated to the topic which I found very interestring. A great tip I learned is to say the sentence out loud and if you pause, there will most likely be a comma there. Also, commas go after transition words and side notes. I chose a paragraph from a lab write up.
Initial:
My hypothesis if plants don’t receive the proper nutrients then they will experience deficiency symptoms, was mostly supported. Plant one the control plant was supposed to be the tallest healthiest plant out of them all but it was only of medium height and had signs of death. Plant six was not supposed to die and it did, so we can’t really analyze it properly. The graph was also off the scale. Because plant one was not the tallest all of the percentages were extremely high in the comparison graph. These errors could be due to measurement errors by the students orit could be the plants weren’t cared for properly, or we could have just gotten a bad batch of plants.
Revised:
My hypothesis, if plants don’t receive the proper nutrients, then they will experience deficiency symptoms, was mostly supported. Plant one, the control plant, was supposed to be the tallest, healthiest plant out of them all but, it was only of medium height and had signs of death. Plant six was not supposed to die and it did, so we can’t really analyze it properly. The graph was also off the scale. Because plant one was not the tallest, all of the percentages were extremely high in the comparison graph. These errors could be due to measurement errors by the students, it could be the plants weren’t cared for properly, or we could have just gotten a bad batch of plants.