D#5HW#8 Grammer assignment #2

This week I chose to focus on staying in the right tense. I have a tendency of useing past tense when i should be using present, and vise versa.I checked out the grammer girl website because I find the tricks there very easy to understand and use. Here is the original paragraph from the research proposal:


What does this have to do with a research paper? Well, I have been researching for a while the reasons behind why farm animals are abuses. Mostly it is because large dairies and farms just don’t care about the animals, they care about the money they make. Because of this selfish attitude, we have many humans getting sick due to meat and animal product illnesses. One of the most well known diseases is known as bovine spongiform encephalopathy, commonly known as mad cow disease.

Here is the revised paragraph:
What does this have to do with a research paper? Well, I had been researching the topic of farm animal abuse before i decided to write a research paper. I found that most of the abuse was because large dairies and farms just didn't care about the animals, they cared only for the money they made off of them. Because of this selfish attitude, we have had many humans get sick due to meat and animal product illness. One of the most well known of these diseases is the bovine spongiform encephalopathy, commonly known as mad cow disease.

One of the tricks I learned is just to say the sentence out loud. This way you can hear what it sounds like and its easier to hear the mistakes. Another trick is to use the finder to find all the haves and hads in the paragraph and change it all to one tense.