D#14 HW#6 Course companticies deadline reflections

Again, I didn't find everything but here is what I got:
I. Applying Knowledge of Rhetorical Contexts
A. Circumstance
I learned that it is important to narrow the research topic that I chose, to look for karios (by the way that was also a new word I learned), and to figure out the purpose and audience for my research papers

B. Purpose
I think the reading helped me the most with creating my conclusion paragraph of my essay.
C. Topic
D. Audience
These things are important so as to not bore the reader and to make my paper interesting enough that I will want to write it
E. Writer
Writing the essay was a course goal so i guess it helped with that aspect of it. It helped me better understand how to conclude a paper, which is part of the writing process.
II. Refining Effective Processes
A. Invention
B. Drafting
Well this week we had to write up a draft so we are most of the way toward that goal. I learn by doing so as i was writing the proposal i learned how to write one.
C. Feedback
learned how to peer edit, something I haven't really done much before. I also got peer edited which will help me make my paper better to :)
D. Revision
E. Presentation
this weeks work helped me achieve my goal of turning a good research proposal. Since I have never written one before it really helped me learn how to wright one.
III. Researching Critically
A. Primary and secondary sources
I also think the part about identifying the type of research to be done will help my papers in the future.

B. Note taking
This weeks topic, conducting research, has really helped prepare me for my paper
C. Summary and paraphrase
It helped me to assess weather my resources were credible or not. This information is always important to know when writing a paper. If your resource isn't credible then is your paper? I would think not. I will use this is future papers to make sure my resources are crediable so my paper is through and crediable.D. Documentation of sources
We had to do some research, site our sources, read about MLA (can I say boring? ;) ) a
E. Information literacy
IV. Writing Persuasively
A. Logical appeals
B. Ethical appeals
C. Emotional appeals
D. Authority
E. Evidence
V. Applying Conventions
A. Citation style
B. Format
In addition, the grammar assignment helped me to focus on the flow of my sentences so that my paper will be better in the end.
D. Structure
My course competency this week was to figure out the organization of my paper. The web we did really help organize my thoughts. The reading also helped as it showed me where I needed to do a little more research.
E. Mechanics

D#14 HW#5 writing project reflection course compenticies

I couldn't find all of the topics in my writing reflections but here is what i did find:
I. Applying Knowledge of Rhetorical Contexts
A. Circumstance
The first thing I did in completing this project was to brainstorm.
B. Purpose
C. Topic
The first step I did when completing this assignment was to think of a topic I wanted to know more about.
D. Audience
E. Writer
II. Refining Effective Processes
A. Invention
I then wrote what ever came to mind. I then went through and put alike paragraphs together and made sure the sentences when together.
B. Drafting
I then organized my research into a workable essay.
C. Feedback
I didn't revise my worked biased on turnitin.com because i only had a 1% match and that was a technical term so I felt I didn't need to revise because of that.
D. Revision
I then revised and edited it then turned it in.
E. Presentation
I then revised a third time and added a title
III. Researching Critically
A. Primary and secondary sources
Next, I researched the topic and wrote the review of research to make sure my resources were credible.
B. Note taking
C. Summary and paraphrase
Then I did a short annotation for each.
D. Documentation of sources
Then I reread through all my annotations and picked the sources that seamed most relevant. I then wrote longer annotations for each of the 8 sources I picked.
E. Information literacy
IV. Writing Persuasively
A. Logical appeals
B. Ethical appeals
C. Emotional appeals
D. Authority
E. Evidence
V. Applying Conventions
A. Citation style
The thing I focused in this paper was using sources in my writing. I usually just write what is on my mind so it was different haveing to use most information from sources.
B. Format
C. Structure
I then went through and put alike paragraphs together and made sure the sentences when together.
E. Mechanics
I think it helped me be more careful because when i revised, and even while writing i was specifically looking out for my spelling.

D#14HW#4 writing reflection

The first step I did when completing this assignment was to think of a topic I wanted to know more about. Next, I researched the topic and wrote the review of research to make sure my resources were credible. I then organized my research into a workable essay. I then revised and edited it then turned it in. These steps worked really well from me so I don't think I would change anything and I definitely would use the same strategy for the next paper.I am most proud that I finally finished this project because I was struggling with where to start. But I finally got it written so that is what I am most proud of. I didn't really have any concerns with this paper I am pretty confident in it. The only thing i might have needed to do was site my sources differently but next time I'll ask about it before I turn it in. Turnitin.com didn't give me any reports so i cant comment on that. The thing I focused in this paper was using sources in my writing. I usually just write what is on my mind so it was different haveing to use most information from sources. One of the course outcomes is to wright a research paper and I feel I achieved that fully.

D#14 HW#2 editing stratigies

This is one of the strategies I used from the owl at Purdue website: "Examine the overall construction of your paragraphs, looking specifically at length, supporting sentence(s), and topic sentence. Individual paragraphs that are significantly lacking length or sufficient supporting information as well as those missing a topic sentence may be a sign of a premature or under-developed thought."
This strategy worked pretty well for me. I looked at each paragraph individually and I was able to pick out what was important and what was not. Also i was able to add a bit to a few of the paragraphs. Peer editing was another strategy that I used because it worked well last time. Peer editors are able to find things you missed. The final strategy that I used was to read my paper out loud. It helps if you hear your writing because you can hear any mistakes you have made.

D#13 HW#5 grammer assignment #5

This week i chose to work on my people tense. I am known for useing alot of "you"s in my paper. I know that is not good writing that instead you are supposed to use "one" or people or something to that nature. I also chose my research paper because i want a good grade on it. I used the daily writing tips web site which said to put one inplace of you and to make sure its himself or herself that goes along with "one" and not "themselve."
Orig:Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect the people. For one, the US government has “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).
Revised:
Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect her. For one, the US government “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).

D#13 HW#4 peer review

http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw8-rough-draft.html
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw8-draft-of-wp3.html
I learned alot of information from my class mates blogs. I liked how Marissa used personal testimony and how she made her argument hard to argue with. I didn't get any reviews on my draft because there are only two other people keeping up with this class and they have already finished their work.Turnitin.com also had no comments for me. I will however go and revise my own draft as I need to add to it to make it longer and I need to make sure it flows well.

D#13 HW#2 paragraph analysis

What is the point of the paragraph?
1. to invite the reader in.
2. to give some background on the subject
3. to give the history on the subject
4. proof for my argument
5-6 proof against my argument containing counter arguments that support my argument
7. to restate why it how my topic relates to my audience and to answer the big question i have been building to
8. to restate my theses and call to action/conclude
How does the paragraph function in the argument?How does the paragraph function in the paper as a whole?
1. helps draw the reader in
2-3. introduces my argument and why it is important and how it relates to my audience.
4-6. the arguements for and against my topic, proof for my argument
7-8 to restate my argument and to get the readers to agree with me then finish with a call to action
How does the paragraph relate to the paragraph above? How does the paragraph relate to the paragraph below? How does the paragraph transition to the paragraph above? How does the paragraph transition to the paragraph below?
Paragraph 1 is the start of the whole paper so it introduces the whole paper as well as paragraph two which explains what paragraph 1 started talking about. Leads in to paragraph 3 which gives the background on the issue. Paragraph 2 transitions by taking the subject in the last sentence of paragraph 2 and inserting it into sentence one of paragraph 3. Paragraph four gets in to the arguements which is the main subject of the paper. It transitions with the word "because". Paragraphs 5 and 6 both give reasons against my arguements as well as my counter arguements to those objections. They use the transition words "even with" and "another." Paragraph 7 is transitioned into by a "however" and it gives the answer to the big question people are wondering. Finally paragraph 8 in transitioned with an "ultimately" and concludes the paper highlighting the main points as well as giving a call to action and finishing with a source quote.

D#12 HW#8 Rough Draft WP#3

Is It A Problem?
“All interest in disease and death is only another expression of interest in life.“
Thomas Mann
Today Americans face many worries, whether it is worrying about a lost job and a mortgage, to having too many bills. We don’t have the time to worry about what we are eating. That is why, for so many years, people have been getting sick form their food, the most common being food poisoning. But what if there was something in you food that there is no medication for, and that once symptoms start to show you are diagnosed dead. Well the bad news is that there is such a thing. It is called Bovine spongiform encephalopathy(BSE). Because this deadly disease dosnt have any cases reported in humans in America, many people would agree that the government is doing a good job of protecting its people. However, others believe there are still not enough laws in place because the possibility of getting BSE still exists. Neither can be proven write or wrong, but the evidence suggests that our government is doing a lot to protect us.
What exactly is Bovine spongiform encephalopathy? “Bovine spongiform encephalopathy (BSE) is a disease condition in cattle between two and eight years old and is always fatal.” Howitworks.com, a well known science website, describes why this disease is so fatal. “Once the infectious agent enters the brain, it can lie dormant for several years (even as long as 10 to 15 years). When activated, the agent kills brain cells, leaving large areas of spongy holes. Also, large clumps of abnormal prion proteins (plaques) are found in brain cells. Once the agent is activated, the disease runs its course in less than one year, and ultimately results in death.” (Freudenrich, Ph.D., Craig). The site also states that the cows become infected by contact with brain or other nervous-system tissue from an infected individual (mostly through ingestion, as seen in later paragraphs). The cause of BSE is unknown but what is known is that BSE is smaller than a virus, it can’t be killed by cooking freezing, or chemically and even disinfectants are powerless against this agent (Freudenrich, Ph.D., Craig. Howstuffworks.com). As can be seen, this agent, if ingested is fatal.
This agent, however, was not always a problem. In fact it is a newer disease. Maxime Schwartz, the author of "How The Cows Turned Mad,” did her research on the subject for the prestigious University of California. After her extensive research, (she even lists her creditable resources in the back of her book) she found that the origin of mad cow was in Europe in the 1730 and actually started with sheep and was call Distemper (p. 5). Reported cases of BSE in cows however, didn’t start until 1985, but weren’t diagnosed until two years later (p 142). First lesions were noticed all over the cows body, the cows lost nerve control and either death or slaughter occurred soon after (p. 143). These cases began popping up all over Europe. The possibility that BSE could spread to humans was considered soon after (p.153). Scientists found that it was possible thus the ban of using infectious organs such as brain, stomach, and nervous tissue since there was no way to identify animals incubating the disease (these animals showed no symptoms) from those that were healthy (p.154). Today, there are still inefficient tests that confirm the presence of BSE in healthy individuals and there have been over 185,000 confirmed cases since 1986, with less than 100 cases being reported per week (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.). Even though these numbers are down from what they used to be, there are still cases being reported.
Because this disease is being reported in such high numbers, one might wonder what is the government doing to protect the people. For one, the US government has “has prohibited importation of ruminants and most ruminant products from countries affected by BSE.” In 1997, the FDA “implemented a ruminant-to-ruminant feeding ban for meat and bone meal as a precautionary measure,” after a case of BES was reported in the state Washington. Also that year, importation of live ruminants and most ruminant products were banned from other European countries. Likewise, since May 1990, the United States implemented a surveillance program that is based on sampling brains of cattle with suspicious neurologic symptoms. In March of 2009, Tom Lutey wrote an article for the Tribune Business News stating that the government was trying to push new beef laws that would require testing on all cattle, as well as a law that would make it tougher for sick cows to become someone’s dinner (Tribune Business News).
Even with all of these measures being put in place, many still believe it is not enough. One such person is editorialist Thomas Ropp. He believes that diet pills could contain mad cow. Even though the idea sounds farfetched, he could be on to something. “The FDA has determined that some dietary supplements contain bovine pituitary extract. Translation: freeze-dried cow brain. This could be trouble if the parts used for this ingredient were to come from cows infected with bovine spongiform encephalopathy, the proper name for mad cow disease” (HEALTH PILLS COULD CARRY 'MAD COW'). However, it is unlikely that this additive is in all diet pills, it is an additive that has to be labeled as cow brain or the like. The people that take these pills believe that “ingesting cow brain improves your wits” (Thomas Ropp).
Another big issue is that animal feed could be contaminated. To cut cost, some large companies feed meat to their cows and other food animals in order for them to grow more quickly. However, respectable farmers only feed their cows pre-mixed food (pellets made from organic material) from a feed lot (BSE Information). According to the FDA, it is illegal to feed ruminant animals meat or any other substance containing animal byproducts. To make sure this and other food laws are being followed, the FDA conducts ruminant feed inspections. “The FDA's December 1998 enforcement plan for the ruminant feed rule includes education as well as inspections. Firms that are found to be in violation of any of the provisions of the regulation are re-inspected to determine if they have corrected the violations. Many of the firms have committed to implementing the regulation, so there are higher levels of compliance at the time of the follow-up inspection.” (BSE Information). If the firm doesn’t straighten up by the second time they are completely shut down (BSE Information). Although some people have objections, the government is doing a good job in protect its people.
However, the question becomes: Is beef safe? According to the FDA, beef is completely safe because of all the laws and inspections they have put in place ( BSE Information). Let us take a look at the evidence, though:
1. There has only been one possible case of Mad Cow in humans in America. This person, however, used to live in the UK where 99% of the cases have occurred (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.).
2. There have only been a few cases of BSE in cows in the United States, thoses of which were reported and contained right away (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.).
3. The FDA has put in place many laws and inspections to make sure beef is safe (BSE Information) and is adding new ones everyday (Tom Lutey).
4. The US does not accept imported beef (BSE Information)
5. There could be cow brain parts in some diet pills, but the risk of contracting the disease from these is extremely low (Thomas Ropp).
6. Each year, the number of reported cases of BSE becomes less (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.).
It is only fair to let one make one’s own judgment at this point. It is my opinion that beef is safe for Americans to keep on eating.
Ultimately, It has been questioned whether our government is doing enough to protect the American public from the deadly beef disease. Since it is a newer disease, only Known since the early 1980’s, there isn’t a cure or a known cause yet. But because there haven’t been any confirmed cases of BSE in humans and very few in cattle, the government is doing its job quite well. There is a miniscule risk of catching BSE from eating beef and other animal byproducts, with the highest risk in ground meats like hamburger and sausage. If Americans want to lessen this risk, Americans can further reduce their risk of contracting the disease by choosing whole muscle cuts of beef like roasts and steak (Lardy, Ph.D, Greg, Charlie Stoltenow, DVM, and Julie Garden-Robinson, Ph.D.). Americans can reduce the risk even still by avoiding beef and other meat byproducts all together. But as the writer, Kurt Vonnegut, Jr. puts it, ““Being American is to eat a lot of beef steak, and boy, we've got a lot more beef steak than any other country, and that's why you ought to be glad you're an American” (Thinkexist.com).

D#12 HW#10 reflection

I think the reading helped me the most with creating my conclusion paragraph of my essay. Writing the essay was a course goal so i guess it helped with that aspect of it. It helped me better understand how to conclude a paper, which is part of the writing process.
I commented on:
Corey D#12 HW#6 _ http://corey2458.blogspot.com/2009/11/deadline-12-homework-6.html
Summer D#12 HW#10- http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw10-reflect
HW#7 - http://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw7-decide-which-presentation-mode.html
Marissa Rodas D#12 HW#5 - http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d12-hw5-develop-closure.html

D#12 HW#7 decide which presentation mode is appropriate

Purpose:
The requirements are posted on ENG102.com for all students to read. So see that for the fulfillment of the paper.
Audience:
The audience expects the paper to be interesting and effective. They will for sure have access to a computer. An essay is the chosen presentation form, so that is what they will respond to and that is where they will be looking for my argument. I don't think there is a specific time my audience would be interested in reading my paper. I think the other students and the teacher will be most interested in my research paper.
Topic:
An essay style presentation is the best for my topic and my argument. The ay mad cow works might be tough for my audience to picture without a diagram so i might put one in the paper.
Author:
I am most familiar with blog applications. That is where I will be posting my paper so that is all I need.

D#12 HW#6 identify possible frames

I tried doing what the book said but in the end, it made my paper seem sloppy and made it less effective. Since the introduction and conclusion are so different, which you will notice in my paper, this doesn't work for me.

D#12HW# develop closer

Well, obviously the issue of weather beef is safe needs to be repeated, as well as the issue of weather or not our government is protecting us. Maybe some support will be repeated but I'm not sure. The only thing that could happen if the issue continues is that more people will die. That could worry or frighten my audience. I would just emphasize these effects and try to put them in that situation. This issue is parallel to many other farm raised diseases, some of which have the same effects. I could add this but I do not think this will healp my cause much.

D#12 HW#4 draft an effective introduction

Mad cow could happen to anyone that eats beef.I'm sure my audience is neutral to the issue at this point because they haven't read my paper yet. However, after they have read it, they will stand with me. My authority to wright comes as a concerned citizen. Many other scientists have written books, blogs, articles, and the like about mad cow. Even reporters and government officials, pretty much every type of person has written something about mad cow. They have strengths as their creditability and I'm not sure this topic has weaknesses, except if the writer is not confident in their opinion, but I have not run across that. My audience probably doesn't know a lot about my topic, but they will learn a lot more after reading my paper.I am not sure how long my paper will be. I don't like having a set amount of pages I have to write. I like the freedom to write enough to get my point across, but not too much that I have to use "fillers" which make the paper uninteresting.

Mad cow could happen to anyone that eats beef. A person could get it from eating their afternoon lunch, or their perfectly prepared dinner. Mad cow in meat is invisible to the naked eye as well as the rest of the 5 senses. One could be eating and not even know it. How can we protect ourselves then? Well one answer is to stop eating meat all together. However, since most people would take the risk rather then give up their precious steak, there are several other options.

This paragraph is something I could use to develop my conclusion/call to action.

D#12 HW#3 create an outline

claim: The government is not doing enough to protect Americans from mad cow.
Section 1: background information.
Section 2: establish the nature of the situation.
Section 3: establish what caused mad cow to be spread.
Section 4: argument.
Section 5: call to action/conclusion