My course competency this week was to figure out the organization of my paper. The web we did really helped organize my thoughts. The reading also helped as it showed me where I needed to do a little more research. My personal goal is to write a great paper and the web will help me with that as well. In addition, the grammar assignment helped me to focus on the flow of my sentences so that my paper will be better in the end.
The people i commented on are as follow:
HW#4
http://corey2458.blogspot.com/2009/11/deadline-11-homework-4.html?showComment=1257661323031#c8353257896129471032
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d11-hw4-evaluate-types-of-resources.html?showComment=1257662037749#c2186124963625428665
HW#3
ttp://summer-english102blog.blogspot.com/2009/11/d11-hw3-develop-evaluate-criteria.html?showComment=1257662165308#c8328108788839374193
http://missrodas.blogspot.com/2009/11/d11-hw3-develop-evaluative-criteria.html?showComment=1257662275966#c7221797709628142236
Saturday, November 7
Friday, November 6
grammer assignment #5 D#11 HW#7
This week I focused on transitions. As I was writing an essay for my nutrition class, i noticed that the sentences didn't really transition well. I used a lot of also's and a lot of however's. In addition, the sentences didn't flow very well. I was disappointed when I couldn't find anything on the grammar girl website about this as I usually use this site. I did however, get some good tips from the owl at purdue. It said one trick was to refer to the last idea in the new sentence or paragraph. It also had some useful transitions and examples. I learned that it is important to use transitions to help the paper flow well. In additation, it helps the reader stay focused on the topic.
Here is the original version:
A healthful weight isn’t what is on the scale, rather the amount of body fat. The BMI is the most common way of measuring overall health, but body composition is needed for people with a lot of muscle. There are several techniques used to measure body composition, most of which do not sound appealing to me, especially the BIA in which electoral current through the body. I would probably try the bod pod as it is the most accurate and least painful.
It is most important, however, to know what the fat distribution pattern which could have an impact on health. Fluctuations in the body weight are the result of fluctuations in energy intake. I notice that when I am sick, I tend to eat less and my body is working harder than normal at rest, fighting off the bug. Because of this, I tend to lose several pounds over the duration of my sickness. This makes sense because when a person is sick, they are expending more energy than they are taking in. What I didn’t know, however, was that we use more energy at rest. I have always thought it took more energy to move around then it did to just lie quietly. I also didn’t know that 10% of our energy goes in to digesting food. I didn’t think it would take that much energy, I guess that is why I feel sleepy after eating a big meal.
Here is the revised version:
A healthful weight isn’t what is on the scale, rather the amount of body fat. The BMI, a measurement of body fat, is the most common way of measuring overall health. Although the BMI is effective for most people, body composition is needed for people with a lot of muscle. There are several techniques used to measure body composition, most of which do not sound appealing to me. The BIA sounds most painful as it is measured by an electoral current passed through the body. I would, on the other hand, probably try the bod pod as it is the most accurate measurement and least painful.
Along with body composition or BMI, it is important to know one’s fat distribution pattern as this could have an impact on health. Likewise, body weight is important in staying healthy. Fluctuations could take place with increased energy intake, but it usually only fluctuates within a 5lb range. I notice this most when I am sick. When ill, I tend to eat less when my body is working harder than normal at rest, fighting off the bug. Because of this, I tend to lose several pounds over the duration of my sickness. Consequently, when a person is sick, they are expending more energy than they are taking in. What I didn’t know, however, was that we use more energy at rest. I have always thought it took more energy to move around then it did to just lie quietly. Furthermore, I didn’t know that 10% of our energy goes into digesting food. I guess that is why I feel sleepy after eating a big meal.
Here is the original version:
A healthful weight isn’t what is on the scale, rather the amount of body fat. The BMI is the most common way of measuring overall health, but body composition is needed for people with a lot of muscle. There are several techniques used to measure body composition, most of which do not sound appealing to me, especially the BIA in which electoral current through the body. I would probably try the bod pod as it is the most accurate and least painful.
It is most important, however, to know what the fat distribution pattern which could have an impact on health. Fluctuations in the body weight are the result of fluctuations in energy intake. I notice that when I am sick, I tend to eat less and my body is working harder than normal at rest, fighting off the bug. Because of this, I tend to lose several pounds over the duration of my sickness. This makes sense because when a person is sick, they are expending more energy than they are taking in. What I didn’t know, however, was that we use more energy at rest. I have always thought it took more energy to move around then it did to just lie quietly. I also didn’t know that 10% of our energy goes in to digesting food. I didn’t think it would take that much energy, I guess that is why I feel sleepy after eating a big meal.
Here is the revised version:
A healthful weight isn’t what is on the scale, rather the amount of body fat. The BMI, a measurement of body fat, is the most common way of measuring overall health. Although the BMI is effective for most people, body composition is needed for people with a lot of muscle. There are several techniques used to measure body composition, most of which do not sound appealing to me. The BIA sounds most painful as it is measured by an electoral current passed through the body. I would, on the other hand, probably try the bod pod as it is the most accurate measurement and least painful.
Along with body composition or BMI, it is important to know one’s fat distribution pattern as this could have an impact on health. Likewise, body weight is important in staying healthy. Fluctuations could take place with increased energy intake, but it usually only fluctuates within a 5lb range. I notice this most when I am sick. When ill, I tend to eat less when my body is working harder than normal at rest, fighting off the bug. Because of this, I tend to lose several pounds over the duration of my sickness. Consequently, when a person is sick, they are expending more energy than they are taking in. What I didn’t know, however, was that we use more energy at rest. I have always thought it took more energy to move around then it did to just lie quietly. Furthermore, I didn’t know that 10% of our energy goes into digesting food. I guess that is why I feel sleepy after eating a big meal.
draw a cluster map D#11 HW#5
I posted a small version because a larger one would not show up in my blog so I also put in the link to the website so you will be able to see what is written
http://www.gliffy.com/publish/1884084/
http://www.gliffy.com/publish/1884084/
Wednesday, November 4
find additional resources D#11 HW#6
I think i have everything I need covered in my resources I have. I talked to a couple of people and they agreed that I had it covered. Of course if any of my fellow students have anything I would gladly take their comments.
evaluate types of resources D#11 HW#4
My audience would like this resource and they would find it reliable because it is a fact based science site. My audience wold just need to know what the resource since it is a well known site and the information is included in the bibliographic citation. I would just have to provide the web address for my audience in order for them to look at the resource. My situation doesn't demand that include this resource but it is important for my audience to understand the background of mad cow.
Develop Evaluative criteria D#11HW#3
1.My audience is my fellow students and my teacher. They probably want to know about my argument and my take on it. They also probably want to know some background information with they also nee to know.
2.My purpose is to figure out if the government is doing enough to protect us against mad cow. I must convey facts and my argument as well as support.
3.My research project is very much up to date. I must address current regulations and the most current cases as well as older cases and regulations. As long as my sources are with in 10 years, they are useable.
4.As I researched the topic, I was able to narrow down my question by the information I was able to gather and articles I read.
5,6. I could talk about other diseases in the beef industry but I want to focus n mad cow.
2.My purpose is to figure out if the government is doing enough to protect us against mad cow. I must convey facts and my argument as well as support.
3.My research project is very much up to date. I must address current regulations and the most current cases as well as older cases and regulations. As long as my sources are with in 10 years, they are useable.
4.As I researched the topic, I was able to narrow down my question by the information I was able to gather and articles I read.
5,6. I could talk about other diseases in the beef industry but I want to focus n mad cow.
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